MORE POETRY
Gap
A dress itself
Or a well- ironed shirt
You see, doesn’t
Exactly work
A drive
With the car
You’ll never be able
To afford
A dream
About the person
You are never again
Meant to hold
Are you up
Looking down
In any hole?
You may find your soul
You may see your soul
Are you up
Waving the water
That fills the hole?
You may see your life
Being out of control
Stuff the gap
Generations before shaped
You are sad
You’re just not blind
Stuff as you can
The wound from being betrayed
You’re just mad
You’re not out of your mind
A dress itself
Or a well- ironed shirt
You see, doesn’t
Exactly work
A drive
With the car
You’ll never be able
To afford
A dream
About the person
You are never again
Meant to hold
Are you up
Looking down
In any hole?
You may find your soul
You may see your soul
Are you up
Waving the water
That fills the hole?
You may see your life
Being out of control
Stuff the gap
Generations before shaped
You are sad
You’re just not blind
Stuff as you can
The wound from being betrayed
You’re just mad
You’re not out of your mind
posted by yioeng @ 12:29 AM
7 Comments:
At 9:17 PM,
ren powell said…
I really wish I could hear you read. I like poetry that uses vernacular language and I get the feeling of a great sense of rhythm in yours. Wish I could hear it.
At 12:47 AM,
Doe said…
quite a poem!
"You are sad
You’re just not blind"
beauuuuuuutiful!!!
i also agree with renkat, wish we could hear you read ;)
At 6:53 AM,
madd said…
yoi..oh this has so many great elements..it's like each one is a little slice of life in it's own right..nice and I agree with renkat..i would really love to hear this one read allowed by you to hear your own inflection given to the words..thanks..m
p.s. please, I don't mind what ever you comment, I enjoy discussions and exchanges..well as long as you agree with me...LOL..I love that you spoke your mind and that we could talk about whatever and see that we really do have that in common..please keep visiting..a lot of the time I post silly or fun stuff..however I do go off into rants and raves from time to time and I love feed back..visit any time
At 9:38 PM,
Natalie said…
This poem is full of opposites Yioeng. Some sadness there too. Great new look to your blog as well.
At 5:24 AM,
Suzan Abrams, email: suzanabrams@live.co.uk said…
Thank you for that, Yio.
Yes, I have been up for a long time looking down in holes. ;)
At 11:14 AM,
Rethabile said…
Cheers. It was fun being here. I came over from Susan's, btw.
At 12:06 PM,
Pallav said…
hello, we like the poem a lot some words touched the deep dark corners of our hearts specially....
Are you up
Looking down
In any hole?
You may find your soul
You may see your soul
Are you up
Waving the water
That fills the hole?
You may see your life
Being out of control
good stuff man!
N
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